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Phantomland is really professional looking art-wise so I think that is working to your dissadvantage here. I find it hard to be invested in the story since it's way too safely written making it rather predictable. It's not bad in a "this does not make any sense" kind of way. I know the story is just beginning but the first chapter lacks a proper hook. There may or may not be awesome and interesting things coming in the future but in a story you should be able to hook the reader from the start.

And there we have it! Legit constructive criticism!

Thanks for calling it professional looking. I admit I’m not a very experienced writer at all. Before getting into comics I never had a hobby of writing prose or fanfics or anything so there’s still a lot to learn about storytelling. I went with a plot that’s fairly linear and easily comprehensible so it’s really no wonder if it seems “safely” written.

The first chapter has gotten a bit of criticism yeah. I figured it would be boring to have too much exposition thrown at the reader right from the start, so I made the beginning very action-packed while you’d still get a basic understanding of the main characters. Buuut it didn’t really appeal to everyone. I hope most of them still proceeded to read the following chapters, since that’s where I introduce things more thoroughly :)

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