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Haha don’t we all want to live in fancy penthouse apartments :’D Jon’s a wealthy dude so he can afford it. I don’t see him as the type who actually cares about luxuries though. The place is probably scattered with ugly crappy furniture

Thanks! I get this a lot and yeah, Fullmetal Alchemist is important to me. I was a faithful reader of the scanlations for it’s entire run (almost ten years) and loved every chapter, so the influence must’ve rubbed on me more or less.

However I’m blind to my own style and don’t really get where people see the resemblance exactly! I’m not particularly impressed by Arakawa’s character designs so I didn’t imitate those on purpose at least. Her art is quite badass otherwise, though. Especially the action scenes!

Great, I’m glad you’re interested! I was worrying all this discussion about my writing would mostly bore people haha. But fuck the police, if there’s anything you’re wondering about the story or characters, I’m always willing to elaborate (while gracefully avoiding to give out spoilers of course). Ask away!

Weeell I don’t expect the reader to realize how serious she is about the family thing yet… So far there’s only a single line vaguely hinting at it after all :D In future chapters there will be a scene or two where the chief will more obviously rationalize her actions with her ideas about family and a mother’s duties. Look forward to it!

Hahaha… I guess there are details in the writing that may seem a little too cheesy depending on the reader. There are scenes that could’ve been entirely serious, but I don’t personally mind having the occasional tongue-in-cheek moment so I end up with stuff like this:

The part about family was relevant to keep because it’s an idea the chief actually believes in. She presents herself as this idealistic mother figure to her people, though of course that’s not the whole truth of her character. It takes a tough boss to lead all those tough people :’)

I’m pretty spontaneous with jokes, so if I come up with a decent one, I’ll usually go with it because what’s the harm, right? I totally see what you mean though; it’s going to be challenging once I get to the more serious chapters, keeping the mood intact and not ruining it with badly-placed jokes. Thanks for the feedback!

And there we have it! Legit constructive criticism!

Thanks for calling it professional looking. I admit I’m not a very experienced writer at all. Before getting into comics I never had a hobby of writing prose or fanfics or anything so there’s still a lot to learn about storytelling. I went with a plot that’s fairly linear and easily comprehensible so it’s really no wonder if it seems “safely” written.

The first chapter has gotten a bit of criticism yeah. I figured it would be boring to have too much exposition thrown at the reader right from the start, so I made the beginning very action-packed while you’d still get a basic understanding of the main characters. Buuut it didn’t really appeal to everyone. I hope most of them still proceeded to read the following chapters, since that’s where I introduce things more thoroughly :)

Duuude where are you pulling this stuff from

Point me to a case where I received constructive criticism and got pissed off about it. “The story is badly written” is not constructive criticism. That kind of statement is completely useless and I can’t work with it. If you have a problem with the comic, here’s two options: either stop reading or take the helpful route and actually tell me what’s wrong with it.

If my general excitement & passion for my project and gratitude for the readers come off as cockiness then that’s too bad I guess! No plans to change my behavior.

YES. This anon knows their stuff

The very first thing I decided when creating the comic was that it has to have cool uniforms! And to have uniforms, you’d need an organization. So that was sort of my entire starting point with the story…

Oh I see A CLEVER PLOY TO MAKE ME DRAW JON IN HIS UNDERWEAR

Just some tiny & ancient model of Wacom intuos. It doesn’t really matter what brand you use, to my knowledge they all work nicely :)